Title: There's a person beneath this shell
Author: Uchiha revenger
Rating: One for utter incoherence of prose(this is the special 'not a native speaker' rate), two for the characterization whiplash, one for crying Hayner.

Full Name (including any titles): Hayner, Seifer Almasy.
Full Species(es): Human, unless Pence and Fuu are right and they're really Skrulls, which I am not ruling out.
Hair Color (include adjectives): Not mentioned.
Eye Color (include adjectives): "blue green eyes" (Seifer).
Unusual Markings/Colorations/Physical Features: Hayner has a 'taned body'. Also a 'displaced' arm.
Special Possessions (if any): Seifer's beanie.

Origin: Cliché Stop'n'Shop.
Connections To Canon Characters: Are alien shapeshifters pretending (poorly) to be them.
Special Abilities: In Hayner's case, bottomless tear ducts. Seifer has the ability to steal Hayner's competence and add it to his own, like a HP drain ability.
Other Annoying Traits: Yes. All of them.

I Say/Notes: I'd let the clunky phrasing and un-idiomatic idiom slide because the writer's profile says she's from Sweden and therefore presumably not as experienced with this English thing as I am, but: a)my literary translation workshop cries out for vengeance upon all those who spend less time on their translations than I do, and b)there are a lot of mistakes that would be caught by switching the Word language appropriately (Alt-T-L-L, people!)and hitting F7.

Seifer would be something close to IC, in all his violent, jerk-ass glory, except that Hayner's so egregiously not himself (in all *his* violent, jerk-ass glory) that the dynamic becomes more than a little creepy. And abusive. I just can't get away from the abuse, it seems.

Sample:

Part One

( ...And the trend of untrustworthy medical professionals in badfic continues )